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The Query Letter that Landed an Agent [Long]

I didn’t want to write this post at first because the title just seemed so clickbait, but I also know that it would be helpful to many writers who are searching for an agent. I wrote a silly post about how I actually “landed” my agent, Mary C. Moore at the Kimberly Cameron & Associates Literary Agency, but I thought I owed it to my book to write a more detailed post about what actually happened.

Someone once told me that finding an agent was like finding your spouse. It’s about finding the right match, not so much finding someone who will take over and make your dreams come true. Knowing this might help you during the rejection process–which is a big step in the whole ordeal. Just because someone turns you down doesn’t have any bearing on your character, worth, or talent. It just means you weren’t a good match. It took me a long time to understand this. Every rejection I got hurt like an arrow to the knee, and would leave me feeling dejected, worthless, and ultimately make me wonder if I should give up and resign the rest of my life to administrative jobs until I retire and die.

Fortunately, I got over myself.

I thought I was done with CHRONICLES OF MEDES years before I really was. When it was time to work on my query, I looked into blogs like Query Shark and Miss Snark. I also looked into some books on query-writing, but honestly the blogs helped more than anything. Both bloggers were agents who posted actual query letters they’d critiqued to help you understand the process, not just what the finished product looks like. Show vs. tell.

After several weeks reading both blogs, (and yeah, you should definitely go through all the archives. Queries about books in genres you’ll never write or read will help you tremendously), I realized that my book still wasn’t ready. Learning to write query letters helped me understand fundamental storytelling flaws that were still evident in my novel.

It was heartbreaking. But it also saved my characters’ lives. (Dramatic much?)

I went back and revised. But this time was different. I wrote the query letter before starting on the next draft of my novel. It became not so much an outline but a guide. If the query letter was how I hooked my audience, then the novel better follow up with all the promises.

Several drafts (and about a year) later, I felt like I had written a novel worthy of my query letter. For those of you who want to know, this is what the letter turned out to be (one or two details edited now that the story has changed). It is also the blurb posted under CHRONICLES OF MEDES on my “Books” page.

Dear Ms….

If you want Toph Roberts dead, you’ll have to get in line. He’s only fourteen and already, one assassin wants to kill him, and another is using him to bait the first. Toph can’t begin to fathom why. He’s magicless, harmless, and he can’t even stand up to his younger brother. Maybe it has to do with magic disappearing from the kingdom, though no one can see that happening except him.

When Toph gets caught up in a misunderstanding among pirates, witches, and magical beasts–who, by the way, are supposed to be extinct–he has more to worry about than the assassins. If he doesn’t stop the magic from leaving the kingdom, he’ll lose his home and everyone he’s ever loved.

CHRONICLES OF MEDES a middle-grade fantasy novel complete at 100,000 words. It is my first novel. I’ve enclosed the first 50 pages, and would love to send you the complete manuscript.

Thank you so much for your time and consideration…

I thought about putting more “credentials” as an English major, published here and there in magazines, but that didn’t really seem relevant nor is it proof that I can or cannot write a novel.

While you’re querying agents, it’s important to keep track somehow of who you’ve sent it to, what you sent, and whether to wait for a response. My philosophy, however, is that I should just not expect a response. Because if I do, I’d be biting my nails, stalking my inbox, and becoming a nutcase. I kept track of that anyway, just because I am a control freak, but then I’d file it under the “submitted” tab in my excel tracker sheet, and try not to look at it again.

Most authors recommend that you pick out 5 agents to query at a time, and then work your way down from there. If your proposal hasn’t worked, then it’s time to revise your query, and start on the next 5.

I didn’t have an exact number of “batches” of agents I wanted to send to. I just started out with the agents whose books sounded awesome and with whom I wanted to work. I found these agents mostly through Writers’ Digest, and basically stalked their website, bio, social media, and blogs before I reached out to them. It’s a scary process sending out something you’ve poured your heart and soul into, and I wanted to make sure we might be a good match.

My first query for CHRONICLES OF MEDES went out in November of 2015. I didn’t send out another one until December 10, 2015. I almost didn’t send it due to crippling self-doubt and a phobia of failure, but that was the first one that received a request for a full. Go figure.

Even after I got my first request for a full, I went back again and revised the novel some more. More crippling self-doubt ensued, wherein I wondered if I should just give up on the whole business and become, like, an accountant or something. I didn’t actually send the full until April (almost 5 months after the request).

Meanwhile I continued querying other agents. Looking back on the pattern, I sent out about 5 a month, but I didn’t have that goal in mind at the time. I just kept researching more literary agents, reading their blogs and bios and trying to decipher whether I’d want to work with them.

Rejections poured in.

In August (9-10 months into querying) I was starting to lose hope, but I decided to send more queries out. By the end of the month, I got another request for a full! So much joy ensued, and nothing would have ruined my day, not even the rejection I received literally the week after.

More revisions. More submissions.

Then. Silence.

Holidays came. So much busyness. And then in the midst of it all, on December 2, 2016 (a year and one month after I began querying my novel, a year after she requested the full, and about eight months after I submitted the complete manuscript), I got an email from Mary, the first agent who had requested a full, asking if I had time to chat over the weekend. I responded that I had time the next morning.

Obviously I did not get any sleep that night. I researched every possible meaning of those words. What did “chat” really mean? Was she calling just to reject me, as apparently some agents are known to do? Did she want to give me feedback? Make revisions request? Offer to represent me (HELLO DREAMS)?

I stayed up reading, pondering, daydreaming, and of course the next morning, I overslept, and missed her phone call. I woke up in full panic mode.

But thankfully when I called her back, she was still cool to talk.  I’d like to apologize to Mary for how awkward I must have sounded. I was so sleep-deprived and not ready for the initial questions when she was trying to get to know me. In hindsight, she probably just wanted to make sure I wasn’t a weirdo (JOKE’S ON YOU MARY). She asked me why I wanted to be a writer, if I saw it as a career or if this was just a one-book thing, etc.

I was so ecstatic. I had no idea how to answer that question. To me, writing had never been just a hobby or a way of living. It is my purpose for existing.

I think eventually I woke up and was able to answer everything okay, lol.

We chatted about an hour about the book, how to make it stronger, where the characters should go, what changes to make. I remember distinctly hearing Mary’s daughter in the background :’) and the whole time, I felt as if the phone call was still part of my dream. She was talking about my characters as if they were real, like they really existed, and weren’t just figments of my weird imagination. I had to keep reminding myself that THIS WAS REALLY HAPPENING.

After about an hour discussing the novel, I had a full page of notes, and I thought that maybe she might reconsider my novel after I had made the revisions she was suggesting.

And then to my surprise, shock, excitement, INSERT ALL THE WONDERFUL WORDS HERE, she offered to represent me!

At the time, the full was out with a few more agents, so I asked Mary to give me some time to reach out to them. That week, I was a ball of nerves and stress and what-if’s. I wasn’t at all present, but keeping myself busy with friends and social events really helped me stay sane. After talking to the other agents, I couldn’t help feeling like Mary was the one who really loved the story and the characters, and who understood where I wanted things to go. Also, she really knows her stuff! (I totally stalk her blog and Instagram now.) So I called her back, we talked some more about the logistics of what would happen next, she sent over the contract, I signed, and BOOM. It was official yo.

I went back to my query tracker, and here are the statistics of the query process for CHRONICLES OF MEDES.

1 – Number of years I spent daydreaming about the book before actually writing it.

3 – Number of years it took me to write the book.

22 – Total number of agents I queried.

1.1 – Total number of years I spent querying.

10 – Number of direct rejections I received.

9 – Number of silent rejections I received.

Countless: Number of times I revised the novel.

3 – Number of agents who requested fulls.

1 – Number of agents who now represent me. After all, that’s all it takes.

I know the hard part isn’t over. I know I have a lot of work ahead of me. But if it’s writing and creating and spending time making my characters come alive, it’s a mountain I’d gladly climb if only to feel the thrill, to be able to say I did it.

This isn’t the happy ending of a story. This is the beginning of something beautiful.


Where is the Love?

A professor in a biography-writing class once told us to choose the people we want to write about carefully.

“You’ll pretty much be living with them for the entire semester,” he said. “You’re going to learn everything there is to possibly know about them. You’re going to hear about their childhood, what they like to eat, what they like to read, if they chew with their mouths open, and if they leave the seat down on the toilet. You better like them. Or you’re going to go crazy.”

This was true. But it’s not just true for biographies, it’s also true about novel-writing. When you start out writing your book, you better make sure you love your characters enough to spend the next two, three, four, fifteen years with them.

I learned this the hard way. I’m always brimming with ideas, mindlessly daydreaming, thinking up new characters and storylines and worlds, traveling from one thing to the next in my crazy brain-train. The problem for me has never been what to write, it’s what to choose. Narrowing it down to one idea and a cast of characters has never been easy.

I just finished up a draft of a novel that I was struggling with, but had no idea why at the time. I loved all the characters, especially the protagonist. But something wasn’t working. I’m only beginning to realize now that maybe I don’t love him enough. At least, not in the way I feel about Toph in CHRONICLES OF MEDES.

It’s weird talking about my affection for someone who doesn’t technically exist, but my feelings are there, and they’re real. When I compare how I feel toward Toph against how I feel about other characters in novels I haven’t completed, I can see the vast difference. I poured heart and soul, flaws and imperfections, pain and suffering, challenge and growth into Toph. I needed to do that to all the characters I write.

When I start on my next novel, I’m going to remember this, to give it my all, to be all in. I’m going to give each character a chance, a real chance, to fail, to grow, to suffer and move on, and to really live.


How to “Land” a Literary Agent: Based on a True Story

A Step by Step Guide

Spend 3 years writing your novel.


Research agents you’d like to work with.


Research how to write a query letter.


Realize your book is not ready. Spend another year re-writing and revising.


Query agents for a year.


Receive rejections.




Query more agents.


Eventually get a request for a full.


Eventually get more requests for a full.


Send. Try not to go crazy. Remain Calm.


Write another novel.


Wait some more.


Receive email from an agent. Get the stress tingles. Try not to get hopes up. Much research over what the phrase “Do you have time to chat?” really means.


Discuss book. Wondering, daydreaming, over-analyzing ensues.


Receive offer of representation.


Try not to cry/scream/shout/dance/run/panic/pass out.


Talk to other agents who had the full, decide on the one who loves your characters and story the most.


Officially accept representation.